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April 12th, 2007 (03:16 pm)

I have to admit that I've been having the odd chuckle at the "17 children" mis-translation courtesy of DelRey for the past week, when, for some reason, the brain clicked in during my morning shower to create this monstrosity. If you don't like AU, you might want to stay away. But I couldn't resist this one. ^^;;

A Day At the Davis Residence

*ta ta ta ta* (footsteps)

...*bata bata bata bata* (running footsteps) *katcha* *SLAM!*

"Oliver, you up? It's morning~," a small boy around six years old said.

"Hey, hey! Wake up!" a young girl's voice said shaking the sleeping teen.

"It's morning! Morning! Morning! It's morning already~!"

Naru sleepily opened his eyes and blinked. Glancing at the clock on the bedside stand, he saw that it was 10 AM. As far as he remembered, he and Gene finally made it home around 7 AM that morning. His brain was barely functioning.

"Hey! Wake--" the girl started to say.

"Shut up!"


"Aah! Don't be so mean to Anne!"

"Shut up! Get out!" Naru glared at the little boy and girl. Both of them shrank at his glare and went straight to the door.

"Why do you always yell like that? You're so mean, Oliver!" the little boy yelled and left the room.

Naru, his brain finally showing some semblance of working, realised that today was Saturday.

'It sure is noisy at home,' he thought ruefully. But that was hardly any great surprise. Currently, there were 17 children living in the Davis household. As he listened, he could hear the sounds of those kids making a ruckus throughout the house. Running a hand through his hair, Naru finally got up to start his day...


When Naru finally came down to the kitchen, he found Luella making breakfast.

"Ah, good morning, Oliver. Sorry, the other kids never seem to listen and always go and wake you up," she said with an apologetic look on her face.

"......That's all right. I'm used to it now," Naru said politely.

"...Good... morning..." a sleepy voice said. Smothering a yawn, Gene came into the kitchen. A young girl around the same age as Anne was pulling him by the hand. However, even though they were about the same age, it was definitely not Anne. Behind Gene, the figure of a young boy could also be made out--again a different boy from the one who woke Naru.

"Hey, seeing how everyone's up, why don't we all go to the amusement park?" a ten-year-old boy asked as he came into the kitchen.

Naru didn't even glance at the boy as he sat at the table. His head was still feeling a little fuzzy--he hadn't had any tea or coffee yet that morning. "If you want to go, then go by yourself. I'm not going," he said coldly.

Gene couldn't help smiling a little wryly at his twin's words. He knew that Naru always spoke like that so he was used to it, but he doubted the other kids would simply give up either.

Gene looked at the others, "Sorry, not today okay? Neither of us are in the mood for it."

The other kids all raised there voices in protest at Gene's words and started to make a fuss.

"C'mon, let's go!"

"The park! The park! Let's go to the park!"

"Let's go! Hey, c'mon!!"

"Hey, already!"

"C'mon, Gene! Oliver! Let's--"

"Shut up! I already said I'm not going, so I'm not going!" Naru glared the other kids into silence. 'What do you want to do? Do you want to go to the lab or are you going to stay home?' he asked Gene using the telepathic link the two of them shared.

'I'd rather stay home, I think. But you should stay home today too, Naru.'

Naru shot a cold look at Gene. 'I'd rather go to the lab.'

'But you're still tired, right? You should stay home for today.'

'If you want to stay here, feel free--'

'You're staying too!'

Naru winced slightly at that mental shout.

But before he could say anything to the contrary, Gene said, "You'll stay at home today, right, Naru?"

Naru sighed in resignation. "Fine," he said.


"C'mon, Oliver, let's play."

"Hey, let's play."

"Oliver, whatcha reading?"

"Hey, can you teach me this part?"

"Oliver, do you know where Gene is?"

"Read me a story."

Naru was currently sitting on the sofa in the living room trying to read a book. Several of his siblings were currently surrounding him trying to get him to play with them that he couldn't concentrate on his book. And the longer it continued, the more angry Naru was getting...


"Shut up! Get out! Leave me alone already!"

"Waaaahhh!" a few of the kids burst into tears and all the other kids ran out of the room. The sounds of their footsteps rapidly retreated and their yells for their mother could be heard echoing throughout the house.

"Mom! Oliver said something mean!"

"Oliver's being mean again!"

"Oliver won't play with me!"


And then......

"Kyaaaa!!!" several people suddenly screamed somewhere in the house.

Naru looked up from his book at the sound of that scream. He was alone in the room, but Gene was standing looking slightly amused over by the door.

"Gh-ghost!!!" several voices screamed.

'You never get tired of that foolishness, do you?' Naru asked Gene mildly exasperated.

'Yeah, well... it's nothing major, right?' Gene asked laughing.


Naru put a book marker in his book and set it aside. He closed his eyes. This household really was noisy. As he listened, he could hear people running about still. The sounds of kids crying, screaming, and yelling still echoed throughout.

He felt Gene sit on the couch next to him.

'Someday, we'll leave here, so we should enjoy this now, right?'

Naru looked mildly annoyed. 'Is that the issue here?'

"Yup! That's right!" Gene said laughing as he got up. "Hmm... I wonder what I'll do next..." Gene said with a mischievous look on his face as he left the room.

A few moments later, Luella entered the room looking a little put-out.

"Oliver, I'm sorry. I really need to go out for a bit, so could you watch the others while I'm gone?"

Naru frowned slightly. "Why don't you ask Gene? I don't think he'd mind taking care of them. Not to mention, I expect the other kids would prefer it that way."

"Yeah, but... I think you're the more responsible one. After all, Gene sometimes gets spirits to play some weird tricks on the other kids, right? That's why I feel better asking you."

Naru looked a little surprised at Luella's words. His eyes narrowed as a thought passed through his mind. 'Hey, you don't mean...'

'? Hmm? You mean you only just realised it? You really are an idiot scientist y'know? Not even realising that you could use this sort of trick...' Gene's laughter echoed in Naru's head.

Naru sighed as he slowly got to his feet.

"All right."

'Gene, I'll get you for this.'


Posted by: Too cute for evil (ginny_t)
Posted at: April 12th, 2007 09:45 pm (UTC)


That was fun. Poor Naru, I think I actually empathised with him here. O_o (Strange - I'm okay with think of him as "Oliver", but not as "Noll".)

Posted by: Shadow (kagedreams)
Posted at: April 12th, 2007 11:16 pm (UTC)

*laughs* Poor guy indeed. ^^; (What's it say when I didn't even think of writing "Noll" when writing this thing? ^^; "Naru" is thoroughly ingrained in me I'm afraid. ^^;; )

Posted by: LKK (lkk)
Posted at: April 12th, 2007 10:54 pm (UTC)

Poor Naru. No sympathy at home. No sympathy from fanfic writers. :D

I'm really pleased that my passing on of the Del Rey mistrans inspired this piece of lunacy. It was fun piece of lunacy!

Posted by: Shadow (kagedreams)
Posted at: April 12th, 2007 11:20 pm (UTC)

*laughs* Nope. Absolutely no sympathy for the poor guy. ^^;

Heheh, that mistrans still makes me laugh. Even back 20-30 years ago that would've made for an incredibly massive family. (Heck, it's just plain huge regardless of time frame). ^^; Glad you enjoyed it. ^_^

Posted by: LKK (lkk)
Posted at: April 13th, 2007 01:57 am (UTC)

My father is one of 15 children. Of course, they were all grown by the time I came onto the scene. But nearly all of them married and had a minimum of two children per marriage. I have LOTS of cousins as you can calculate. So I can thoroughly attest that a 17 children family is one huge family indeed. (You should see our family reunions. LOL)

Posted by: Kakurenbo (akinarei)
Posted at: April 13th, 2007 04:57 am (UTC)



I have x-number of cousins and whatnot too, but I'm an only child. XD I like it better that way-- except I don't have anyone to blame anything on.

Posted by: Kakurenbo (akinarei)
Posted at: April 13th, 2007 05:00 am (UTC)

You know what's funny? I just wrote that quote out on something so I could disntiguish my leftovers from my parents. You know how in restraunts the to-go boxes are all the same?

I usually quote manga on them so I can tell which is mine right off the bat. My parents think I'm insane--I call it being smart.

I quoted that mistranslation, too! ^_^;;

Yes, I'm very odd.

Posted by: Too cute for evil (ginny_t)
Posted at: April 13th, 2007 03:55 pm (UTC)
I love to romp!

I think that's awesome! Makes me wish I still lived with someone, so I could do that.

(Also, I'm vaguely disgruntled that someone's puppy-romping through a Shadow post, and it's not me!)

Posted by: yamikakyuu (yamikakyuu)
Posted at: April 13th, 2007 01:04 am (UTC)

That is great! Nice job, Gene shouting at Noll via telepathy is funny XD

Posted by: Kakurenbo (akinarei)
Posted at: April 13th, 2007 01:20 am (UTC)

That was fabulous! And Oliver doesn't even like children, either!

And while he's slightly nicer, he seems to play more tricks.

LOVE the idiot scientist comment!

Posted by: Shadow (kagedreams)
Posted at: April 13th, 2007 02:37 am (UTC)

Cheers! BTW, I get the feeling that, ultimately, we ended up crossing wires on the "constructive feedback" issue. ^^; If you do have constructive criticisms etc., you should definitely feel free to send them my way. ^_^

Posted by: Kakurenbo (akinarei)
Posted at: April 13th, 2007 04:55 am (UTC)

Ah! Okay. I was afraid I'd offended you.

But I loved this little one-shot!

Somehow, I can't see Gene as anything but a trickster, in some cases.

Posted by: サヤカ (sayaka86)
Posted at: April 13th, 2007 01:29 am (UTC)
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nice job, totally got me laughing, poor naru tho :p

ermm don't mind me asking, but what is AU...?

sorry i keep asking such things =.='

Posted by: Shadow (kagedreams)
Posted at: April 13th, 2007 01:49 am (UTC)


AU = alternate universe

Technically, if you follow the English manga release, it's not AU, but I'm more faithful to the J version, so it's AU to it. ^^;;

Posted by: f_ireworks (f_ireworks)
Posted at: April 13th, 2007 11:31 am (UTC)


That was a lot of fun, Shadow. I loved how all the kids kept wanting to play with Naru even though, to Naru, Gene was the more capable one of dealing with them. Gene, you trickster, you!

Posted by: サヤカ (sayaka86)
Posted at: April 13th, 2007 12:00 pm (UTC)
Naru & Mai 2

oh ic.. AU means that.. thanks :)

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