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Oh my... (ff nothingness)

So, last night, I decided to take a "short" break in the midst of doing Kokumono edits and read through FF2 that I finished writing ~2.5 years ago. A couple of people have commented about wanting to be able to read it in English, but I couldn't remember what the story was entirely about and if it would be possible to do that. While I did write the entire outline in English (it's 15-20pgs long IIRC), the entire story was written in Japanese. Until yesterday, any time I looked at the file, I couldn't bring myself to actually *read* it. I *cringed* at the very thought of it. But I finally sat down with it yesterday... >.>


Naru, you're talking a bit too much like a girl, did you know that? So is Lin and Yasuhara. I mucked up a bit with Bou-san too, but he's a bit more consistent. >.<; There were a number of errors (spelling, grammar) that I noticed right away, but what really caught my attention was... I didn't remember virtually any of the story. It took me over 3 *hours* to read the thing (it's ~160 pgs on file), during which time I was wondering, "how did I fix this?", "how does this tie with that?", and even "how did I end this?!". It was a bit weird; I had no idea how everything would wrap up together. >.> I did remember, vaguely, some of the different aspects of the story, and I definitely remembered the iron maiden scene (I completely forgot about the office scene though ^^;;). I didn't realise I created a setting issue in the story (Apparently, I forgot to move things to Tokyo at some point. Oops; insta-3+ hour commute...) or just how close to Naru x Mai I made that thing. (That's my explanation for it. ^^;; Otherwise, Naru's a bit too off-chara. *laughs* *Naru* carried Mai in one scene?! Even though Bou-san was there?? Yeah, right. ^^; When Mai passed out from breathing formaldehyde fumes in the bio lab (Yasuhara's school), it was Lin who carried her to the nurse's office after he and Naru found her. Mai (who was floating around watching all this from outside her body (and only after realising she was seeing things from outside her body did she think that might not be a good thing)) was a bit disappointed (she'd rather have had Naru carry her), but readily admitted to herself that her weight might be a bit much for Naru to carry. ^^;

So, what does all that rambling mean? Well, I honestly don't know if I can write this in English. There's a lot that needs to be fixed. It's not a matter of translating this; it would be re-writing it entirely in English. My Japanese and English writing styles are... *probably* different, I think. It would also need to be seriously fixed up. I don't know if I could seriously face working with that story anymore. There was some fan-spec where the others debated Mai's own abilities. I don't know if I'd agree with *it* anymore either. ^^; Quite frankly, it was really weird reading that thing again. ^^;;


I'll look at it again on the weekend and see if the thing's salvageable, but... quite frankly, I wouldn't hold my breath. I have an urge to bury it in peat. ^^;;
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